This was my Madness 2010 submission, its an animated short! I tweaked the animation, and reanimated some parts to make it better I hope you guys enjoy. This was one of my better works. Also please excuse the bad dialog and story holes! My 19 year old self doesn't know how to write dialog.
The drawing needs some work [even though you are obviously not done] The hands are no very good (no offense) The bodies jerk around too much, very unrealistic. no one has emotion in their voices. Will there be color? I think just to introduce the characters there should at least be a colored start page.
So you need a little work, but very nice plot, and it's not choppy, very nice!
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Not many people criticize my work. I have to say though I pretty much agree with it all. This flash I made over a year ago. I just smoothed some motion tweens and resubmitted it. The artwork was awful, cause I really did not have much of an art style when I made this. Really the main reason I submitted this was because it has smooth transitions, and the voices were always bitter sweet, depending on the viewer. Also I really wanted to show some of my previous flashes, along with newer ones.
As far as the voice actor, I was actually surprised he did it for me. He's fairly popular on newgrounds and youtube. He's most known for doing a few voices in egoraptor's awesome series. He sent me the lines and really didn't have time to alter them. Also I was running short of a deadline so I couldn't wait for him.
Thanks for the advice, I'll be sure to not make the same mistakes as seen in this submission
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The bodies jerk around too much, very unrealistic.
no one has emotion in their voices.
Will there be color? I think just to introduce the characters there should at least be a colored start page.
So you need a little work, but very nice plot, and it's not choppy, very nice!
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This flash I made over a year ago. I just smoothed some motion tweens and resubmitted it. The artwork was awful, cause I really did not have much of an art style when I made this. Really the main reason I submitted this was because it has smooth transitions, and the voices were always bitter sweet, depending on the viewer. Also I really wanted to show some of my previous flashes, along with newer ones.
As far as the voice actor, I was actually surprised he did it for me. He's fairly popular on newgrounds and youtube. He's most known for doing a few voices in egoraptor's awesome series. He sent me the lines and really didn't have time to alter them. Also I was running short of a deadline so I couldn't wait for him.
Thanks for the advice, I'll be sure to not make the same mistakes as seen in this submission
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